陌上繁花绽书包网:写作常见错误举例

    在听说读写四项最基本的语言技能中，“写”经常被认为最难。由于诸多原因，在写作过程中同学们会不可避免地犯错。笔者将这些错误略加归纳，希望能对大家的写作有所帮助。请先看下面这篇同学的习作：
    I think we might haven't see each other for several months.I missed you very nuch.I hope to see you more quickly.
    I have made a schedule in order to let us visit better.When you come next week,first,we will se my college.My college has a long history and the envoment is very good.It's a good place to study.At the second day,we will go to Zhong Shan Park which is very famous.Next day,we will go to the supermarket to buy something we want to eat,then go to the shopping center to buy some clothes.By the way,we can go to the seaside.This city is a beautiful coast city,so going to the seaside is of great necessary.Also,I wish you can stay for a long time.
    But you should attend the safe of yourself.When you come,give me a telephone,I will go to meet you.I think you should take more clothes.Because the weather is bad.ok,all of this,I hope to see you.
    Best wishes to you!
    我们可以把这篇文章中出现的错误大体划分为四类：
    　　一、低级错误
    是指那些最基本的，如果仔细核对检查可以避免的错误。譬如说拼写错误，主宾格错误，时态错误，动词变位错误等等。让我们一一找出此文章中的这类错误。
    1.I think we might haven't see each other for several months.
    （动词变位错误，应是seen;not应与might构成否定缩略形式mightn't）
    2.I missed you very much.
    （时态错误，应是miss）
    3.This city is a beautiful coast city,so going to the seaside is of great necessary.
    （有两个问题：形容词和名词问题。coastal city写成coast city;is of great necessary至少应将necessary改为if of great necessity）
    4.My college has a history and the envoment is very good.
    （拼写错误，envoment应为environment）
    　　二、句子结构错误
    句子结构错误中常见的有run-on sentence（串句）和sentence fragment（断句）。请看例句：
    1.I think we mightn't have see each other for several months,I miss you very much.
    （两句话中间通常不能用逗号连接，应该加上并列连词and，这种错误在《英语写作基础》中改写病句部分经常碰到，但同学们自己下笔的时候却往往还是会犯同样的错误。此句应改为we mightn't have seen each other for several months and I miss you very much.）
    2.I think you should take more clothes.Because the weather is bad.
    （后半部分是断句。因为because是连词，只能引导一个状语从句，不能构成一句话。应改成：(I think you should take more clothes because the weather is bad/because of the bad weather.）
    3.It is a good place to study.
    （此句可以，但还是建议把place视为应做介词宾语，而不是study的动词宾语，改成it is a good place to study in.）
    　　三、词不当及结构累赘
    用词不当是因对词的用法模糊而引起的。如：
    1.I hope to see you more quickly.
    （quickly在于强调速度之快，用在此不合适，应改为I hope to see you soon.）
    2.We will see my college.
    （see在于强调看的结果，在此不合适，应改为we will have a look at my college.）
    3.At the second day…
    （具体到某一天，应用介词on，应改为On the next day…）
    4.I think you should take more clothes.
    （take为拿走，bring才是带来。此句应改为I think you should bring more clothes.）
    又如结构思赘，即句子出现多余成分，使句子繁琐冗长，影响表达：
    1.We will go to Zhong Shan Park,which is very famous.
    （此句中直接用形容词做定语即可。可改为We will go to the famous Zhong Shan Park.）
    2.I will go to meet you.
    （此句中go to为多余，可改为I will meet you at the station.）
    　　四、中文式英文
    1.I have made a schedule in order to let us visit better.
    我为这次游玩做了一个安排。
    （原文完全按照中文的思路一一翻到英文，造成中文腔太浓，可改成I make a schedule for your visiting.）
    2.But you should attend the safe of yourself.
    要注意安全。
    （错误百出，应改为But you should take care of yourself.）
    3.When you come,give me a telephone.
    你来的时候，给我打个电话。
    （用中文思维来写英语句子的典型例子，应改为Please call me when you come.）
    以上四点是同学们在写作中易犯的错误，希望大家能引起重视。当然，要从根本上避免这些错误同学们还是应该多读各类英语作品，培养语感，吸取语言知识，这样，英语水平就会上一个大台阶，就不难写出较好的英语作文了。^